My Rap

[The Canadian]

Hey guys, I'm a twelve year old who wants to become a rapper. I've shown some raps to my friends, and they said it's pretty good, but I want your opinion. This song is called "A Bottle of Water"

 

How much a dollar really cost

Is the real question

I asked a homeless man

He said "It's a blessing"

 

A dollar

Can buy you a bottle of water

So get what you need

Don't be so greedy

 

Don't get the

Candy or the taffy

Cause think about

When something horrible happens

 

Would you take the candy 

Or the bottle of water

If I asked this in Africa 

Kid'll be startled because of their options

 

A bottle of water

Can feed me

All candy does 

Is cheat me

 

So let's get a bottle of water

And split it 7 billion ways

Give to the world

Now everyone is cured

 

So no

A dollar does not cost 100 pennies

It teaches you lessons

Like befriend your enemies

 

So let's get a bottle

And give it to everyone

Once that bottle is done

Let's get another one

 

Inspired by Kendrick Lamar "How Much a Dollar Really Cost"

 

Tell me what you think. Thanks

[thejazz97]

I mean, if you're writing stuff, you're doing better than I ever did (I used to want to become a rapper - the ability was there but couldn't write worth a rip)

 

This sounds like an Earth Day rap tbh tho

[thejazz97]

@Kazmanian Devil @Spoderman @Lil B From The Pack @Alain Vigneault

[Kazmanian Devil]

 

@Baer.

[AV.]

Good.

[The Canadian]

7 minutes ago, thejazz97 said:

I mean, if you're writing stuff, you're doing better than I ever did (I used to want to become a rapper - the ability was there but couldn't write worth a rip)

 

This sounds like an Earth Day rap tbh tho

 

5 minutes ago, Kazmanian Devil said:

 

@Baer.

 

2 minutes ago, Alain Vigneault said:

Good.

Thank you. You're helping me reach my dreams!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[riffraff]

[AriGold]

Better then Bangs..

 

This is dedicated to all the lettuce out there..

 

 

[SaintPatrick33]

You should post a sound clip of you spittin these rhymes homedawgz, or better yet make a music video 

[The Canadian]

23 minutes ago, SaintPatrick33 said:

You should post a sound clip of you spittin these rhymes homedawgz, or better yet make a music video 

Only problem is that I don't know how to.

[Twilight Sparkle]

3 minutes ago, The Canadian said:

Only problem is that I don't know how to.

record on your fone and slay deez rhymes holding a selfie stick, then use a random movie maker and apply a fish eye lens filter

[thejazz97]

Just now, Twilight Sparkle said:

record on your fone and slay deez rhymes holding a selfie stick, then use a random movie maker and apply a fish eye lens filter

I take it you have experience?  

[Twilight Sparkle]

1 minute ago, thejazz97 said:

I take it you have experience?  

i used to do cam shows >__>

[thejazz97]

1 minute ago, Twilight Sparkle said:

i used to do cam shows >__>

[The Canadian]

8 minutes ago, Twilight Sparkle said:

record on your fone and slay deez rhymes holding a selfie stick, then use a random movie maker and apply a fish eye lens filter

Ok, I'll try.

[Mathew Barzal]

1 minute ago, The Canadian said:

Ok, I'll try.

[AngelicHearts]

Looks good! It's hard to imagine what it sounds like without any music attached to it because it sounded slightly choppy in my head when I read it, but the overall idea is well done. It's nice to see raps that are about real issues in the world rather than rambling about clubs and women.

[AriGold]

This has potential to be thread of the year..

 

IF

 

He does a video..

[AriGold]

@Caboose @DollarAndADream @Master Mind @Ilya Kovalchuk. @Patrick Kane 

[Master Mind]

It always takes guts sharing something personal like this on the internet, good on you.

 

But if you're willing to do that, surely you'd make a video too...right?

 

I'll be patiently waiting for it.