Descision I Made (lyrics)

[The Canadian]

Hey it is me, The Canadian. I created A Bottle of Water. If you want to check it out, it is in the forum in white noise called A Bottle of Water (Acoustic Version). Anyways, I have decided to make a new song, and post it on CDC, but please tell me the truth. Last time I felt that people were to nice to me, and it felt like you guys didn't mean it so please be honest. Do not be very rude either, just tell me what I could've done better. And I might make an acoustic version if you guys like the song. Here are the lyric for my new rap song Descision I Made.

 

I bring the game,

To the next level, 

There's something about me,

That makes me so special,

 

I never thought,

I'd get this far,

People said I couldn't do it,

But I reached for the stars,

 

I don't care what you think,

I made it,

All the haters that hate,

I used to hate it,

 

Now I know,

That everywhere I go,

There's posters of me on the wall,

I feel above all,

 

I spit fire,

Like Supa Hot,

You are pretty good,

But you're a long shot,

 

That's what I thought before,

I'm over it now,

Now, I'm performing all night,

I take a million bows, (idk if I spelled bows right)

 

It's getting pretty old though,

Imma change it,

Now I throw roses,

I'm the strangest,

 

Whatever I did,

It helped me all the way,

I didn't want this life,

It was the descision I made.

 

What do ya think? Please be honest, but don't be too harsh.

 

[luckylager]

Without music, it isn't a song.....

 

 

 

[Kazmanian Devil]

8 minutes ago, The Canadian said:

I never thought,

I'd get this far,

People said I couldn't do it,

But I reached for the stars,

I tried delivering this one myself and it felt pretty clunky.

[The Canadian]

6 minutes ago, luckylager said:

Without music, it isn't a song.....

 

 

 

song lyrics

[Kragar]

13 minutes ago, The Canadian said:

I take a million bows, (idk if I spelled bows right)

 

 

You did it right with "bows", but there is only one "s" in decision 

 

I'm not a rap guy, so I will leave the critical comments to those more in the know.

 

Good luck, and have fun with it!

[Blue Jay 22]

Needs more substance.

 

"It's getting pretty old though,

Imma change it,

Now I throw roses,

I'm the strangest,"

 

^^^revise or take this one out. It doesn't rhyme or make sense.

[The Canadian]

1 minute ago, Blue Jay 22 said:

Needs more substance.

 

"It's getting pretty old though,

Imma change it,

Now I throw roses,

I'm the strangest,"

 

^^^revise or take this one out. It doesn't rhyme or make sense.

kk. This song wasn't meant to be serious, but thank you for being honest.

[Nuxfanabroad]

42 minutes ago, luckylager said:

Without music, it isn't a song.....

 

 

 

This is why I recommend hearty flatulence whilst reading my limericks...

:^)

[luckylager]

37 minutes ago, The Canadian said:

song lyrics

Okay then 

I just read the main text again

and you say it's a rap?

 

 

 

 

 

[King Heffy]

Really needs multies and longer rhyme schemes. 

[luckylager]

2 minutes ago, Nuxfanabroad said:

This is why I recommend hearty flatulence whilst reading my limericks...

:^)

Well at least when I read a Limerick I can hear an Irish jig toodling away in my head.

 

Buddy boy just wrote a nap rap apparently. 

[Nuxfanabroad]

1 minute ago, luckylager said:

Well at least when I read a Limerick I can hear an Irish jig toodling away in my head.

 

Buddy boy just wrote a nap rap apparently. 

Hot off the presses, L2:

 

Leprechaun-wisdom.. taught a new trick

Lad when it's tough, roll on with limerick

This grind takes it's toll

 Dealt limes? squeeze out soul

With green-envious laugh, fool's optimistic

[luckylager]

22 minutes ago, Nuxfanabroad said:

When chasing rainbows for lucky charms

Fools gold rush should sound the alarms

Whether hell's bells diamond

Or percussion in perfect timin'

The page, like a steaming pile on the farm

 

 

 

[Nuxfanabroad]

3 minutes ago, luckylager said:

When chasing rainbows for lucky charms

Fools gold rush should sound the alarms

Whether hell's bells diamond

Or percussion in perfect timin'

The page, like a steaming pile on the farm

 

 

 

Tried that one with background noises! Nice :^)

[luckylager]

1 minute ago, Nuxfanabroad said:

Tried that one with background noises! Nice :^)

Lol!

 

"I'm never sharing with you again, GAWD!"